Today I have a very exciting (and very scary!) post! It’s my first creative piece on this blog.
I saw a flash fiction challenge from Fractured Faith Blog here, and it gave me the perfect opportunity for my first piece. I’ve chosen to write about the receipt with the Muller yogurt and the banana.
I’ve never written flash fiction before, so I hope you enjoy it! It was a lot of fun to write! As always, any feedback is very welcome.
Felicity walked into the service station, feeling in her pocket for the two fifty pence coins. That was her tips from her shift. It had been busy, with red faced men squeezed into every corner, a cold pint pressed into their sweaty hands, anxiously watching to see if England would go through to the semi finals. Disappointed, they trickled out, until all that was left were a few empty peanut packets and a row of dirty glasses.
She barely even glanced at the pricey sandwiches. What was the point? Instead, she focused straight on the snacks. On the top shelf, there was a single Muller Rice. She hated rice pudding, but picked it up anyway. It probably had more nutritional content than a packet of crisps, and was twenty pence cheaper.
At the checkout she picked up a banana, spotted with brown bruises. She paid for the items, and slid the coppers into her pocket.
She climbed back into her car and reached for the can of Coke she’d taken from work. Her boss had watched her slip it into her bag, but she didn’t mind. She knew her circumstances, and did what she could to help, but at the end of the day, she was running a business. If a couple of cans went missing, she would simply turn a blind eye. A few weeks ago, she’d sent Felicity home with a multipack of crisps, claiming that they were nearly out of date. How this could be the case when she was so careful with stock rotation Felicity did not know, but she accepted the crisps with no hesitation.
She rummaged in the glove compartment for a spoon, and wiped it on the sleeve of her cardigan.
This is really good!! A nice idea for a blog post 🙂 well done!
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Thank you so much, that really means a lot!☺️
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Good going!!
Welcome to flash fiction!! 😀
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Thank you! I have to say, I enjoyed doing it!😂
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It is great fun! 🙂
You could try your hand at all the various flash fiction challenges out here!
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Brilliant. Loved it. Dripping with poignancy and yet so real. Can I reblog? Pretty please??
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Haha, I just saw this! Of course, thanks for the reblog!☺️
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I’ve never seen this done before, and it’s really good!
Jas xx
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Thanks!
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I would never have thought to do a post like this and it’s so creative! I would definitely love to see more. Well done, lovely xo
Samantha | https://believeinamiracle.co.uk
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Aw, thank you so much! That means a lot!
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I haven’t seen anyone do this before but it’s such a great idea. I love what you wrote – really enjoyed reading it. Would love to read more to know what happens 🙂
Amy,
https://creativenails.uk
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Ah thank you so much!
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I love your interpretation. It made me feel and created vivid images in my mind. Pretty amazing for a short piece.
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Aw, thank you so much! That means a lot!
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I’ve never seen someone do this before, this is such a great idea for a post x
Sophie
http://www.glowsteady.co.uk
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Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed!
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This is the first time I’ve read something like this, it’s a great idea. Will you do a follow up? I’d love to read more! X
Lisa | http://www.lisasnotebook com
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Hey, I’m glad you liked it! I actually borrowed this character from a piece I wrote for uni! I was quite pleased with it, so I might find out if I can post it, and do that!
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Well done, very creative.
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Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed it!☺️
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Well done, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this – keep up the great work and thanks for sharing!
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Wow. This is excellent work. Please. Please keep writing creatively. You’re very good at it! I moved to this!
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Aw! Thank you so much!☺️
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My pleasure
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Thanks for teaching me something new tonight hun! Well done for being braved and putting this together, keep up the good work xxx
Jenna
https://jennasworldview.com/2018/06/29/intuition/
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Thank you so much!☺️
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This was so creative, very well-written. Have you thought about developing this further. I think you should.
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Wow, thank you so much for your lovely comments. I can’t tell you how much it means to me! I actually used this character in a piece I wrote for uni!
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Loved reading this! You put the reader straight into a very believable scene. Really enjoyed reading this. Keep it up! 🙂
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Ah thank you! I’m so glad you enjoyed!
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